Diamesa

Diamesa

875 Reads 45 Votes 3 Part Story
unveiledwords By unveiledwords Updated Sep 25

Lynn Amadore is the typical university student: perfect boyfriend, great friends, and a bright future ahead of her. Her sister, Irene, is the only shadow in Lynn's perfect world, a constant reminder of their difficult past. One day, a group of strangers enter their lives, and everything Lynn knew about this world is suddenly changed. What used to be a simple life turned into a tangled web of unveiled secrets, supernatural powers, and looming death. With an inevitable fate before her, Lynn struggles to find her own path in the sinister world of Diamesa.

  • elementals
  • faith
  • family
  • friendship
  • humor
  • legend
  • love
  • mystery
  • powers
  • romance
  • supernatural
  • trust
  • truth
TheTickingCrocodile TheTickingCrocodile Mar 30, 2012
Wow, gripping prologue! Excellent, excellent job! The part about reincarnating and the favor confused me a bit. :\ Also, you say "four neighboring COUNTRIES" attacked their village... Maybe it should be four neighboring towns? Or cities? Or villages?
                              
                              Keep writing,
                              -Bianca
- - Mar 28, 2012
I can see this story means a lot to you, in the way that you write. I cannot tell you otherwise at his point.
writeforfun writeforfun Mar 28, 2012
Very good job setting up the story! Your word choice definitely made the prologue mysterious, but I got very confused with the part about the war (who died, what was decided, etc.). I hope you continue to clarify this in the net couple chapters.
AlexisSims AlexisSims Mar 28, 2012
Love the dark fairytale atmosphere established here. Very good prologue!
AwesomelyBlaze AwesomelyBlaze Mar 28, 2012
OMG! GASP! THIS IS SOOO COOL! 
                              
                              ...ahem. Sorry about that. Anyway, I love the prologue. The story and the whole 'one suffers and one gets protected and stuff' is original so far. Keep it up!
TheSkylarMoon TheSkylarMoon Mar 27, 2012
I've always loved the concept of controlling the elements....-.- Oh well that had nothing to do with anything! GREAT JOB NONETHELESS!!!