The Blind Teenager Part 1 of 2 (Non-edited Version)

The Blind Teenager Part 1 of 2 (Non-edited Version)

550 Reads 6 Votes 2 Part Story
Jonathan M. Kimel By JonMKl Updated Mar 07, 2011

A shy teenage boy, Alin, finally says "Hello" to the girls he's been liking for quite some time. She doesn't turn his courageous act down and befriends him. Friendship turns into a relationship and Alin's best friend, Kaytlin, turns a little green with envy. Can Alin continue his relationship with the girl of his dreams and keep Kaytlin as his closest friend or will he lose his best friend?

dreamy_ dreamy_ Feb 06, 2011
Well Written, nice grammar, I don't exactally like preppyness hah but this is good!
                              
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JonMKl JonMKl Feb 06, 2011
@Angel_Eyes24 nah ur not being a jerk, perfectly fine by me. Your opinion is your opinion. And I made Larissa "perfect" for a reason.
                              
                              And thank you to everyone who commented and read and/or fanned (XD sounds funny) :D it really means a lot to me
porshalovebby porshalovebby Feb 06, 2011
Good job!!! There was barely any grammar mistakes! I agree with Angel_Eyes24 though about alin and Larissa 
thetis27 thetis27 Feb 06, 2011
will u be writing more of it? i want to know more...so maybe continue the story>? thanks. oh, i found ur story on SYS
- - Feb 06, 2011
I liked this a lot. Besides some spelling mistakes, it was very good
Nikkicole Nikkicole Feb 01, 2011
That was wonderful! I quite enjoyed reading something from a guy's point of view for once!!! Voted!