Soar - First Draft

Soar - First Draft

13.9K Reads 248 Votes 8 Part Story
Phoebe By shebephoebe Completed

Please note: This is a first draft and only remains in published status for the sake of comments the author wished to keep. If this is your first time reading "Soar", it is recommended that you seek out the revised edition on the author's profile. It'll make more sense.

She was a nameless slave girl, her foreign blue eyes a curse which promised nothing but suffering. Her only concern was survival.
Until she met the show dragon.
He could not fly; he could not breathe fire; he was anything but fierce. But she could speak to him.
Neither had ever dared to hope for a life beyond their captivity. This was the only world creatures like themselves could expect. But together, with a bond as ancient as legend, they have the strength to defy the lot they have been dealt.
All either of them wants is a place to belong. Following rumors and fairy tales, they find a place that could be that home, if they are willing to fight for it.
That world, caught up in a secret war for its own survival, may ask more of them than they are willing to give.
He wants to help her learn who she really is, and what she is capable of. She wants to give him what every dragon needs: a chance to soar.

  • dragon
  • dragon-rider
  • dragons
  • flight
  • flying
  • freedom
  • medieval
  • slave
  • soldier
  • sword
  • swords
  • war
  • warrior
  • warriors
- - Aug 15, 2016
Please forgive me of my ignorance, but I read this novel a few months back and was excited about the revised version. I was wondering where I might read that.
MelanieCoetzee MelanieCoetzee Oct 02, 2015
The storyline is quite unique. Taking an idea of a dragon and then strippinh it away and giving it new life. ;)
MelanieCoetzee MelanieCoetzee Oct 02, 2015
These two passages really feel disconnected from one another. One moment she's reminiscing and the next she's working? Maybe an indication of time pass would help.
MelanieCoetzee MelanieCoetzee Oct 02, 2015
This piece is good. This thought however might be better of you put it in italics. Its a lot more of a personal thought than the rest. ^_^ if you don't mind me pointing that out. Not all writers are a fan of it.
ghostwatcher11 ghostwatcher11 Apr 11, 2015
@ themagicmirror yeah thats who I ment haha I imagine him with a strong voice.
ghostwatcher11 ghostwatcher11 Apr 11, 2015
Just asking what accent does the guy have, because I'm having trouble picturing it.