Twin Flames

Twin Flames

1.7K Reads 35 Votes 10 Part Story
Ilse V Rensburg By IlseVrensburg Updated Jul 31, 2016

*Unedited/draft* 

Laleh Rossouw isn't normal. 

At least that's what made up majority of the whispers that followed her throughout her life. It used to bother her up until she turned sixteen and her perspective on reality changed, quite literally. Blessed with a unique blend of speed, strength and sight she has no idea why she has always felt so different in a world that no one can see, but her. 

She assumes she has her abnormalities all under control until the dreams start, four years later. Dreams that leave her feeling empty and alone and longing for the one constant they share - Shayne. But the dreams aren't the only things invading her picture perfect life for soon after Shayne awakens her subconscious she encounters a demon who just can't seem to stay away from her while frequently catching glimpses of the rare and mysterious fallen ones. 

It all seems to be too much of a coincidence. What is she? Is Shayne her Twin Flame, and if he is why are they not together?  

Her subconscious knows the dark truth but isn't telling. Because only one thing could be so terrible that it would leave you oblivious to your true nature. Only one thing - Tearing your soul in half. And while she is blinded by her curse a fearsome creature lurks in the shadows. A hunter of the fallen, and he is hungry, very hungry for a broken soul.

  • book
  • demons
  • friendship
  • love
  • soul-mates
  • store
IlseVrensburg IlseVrensburg Apr 29, 2012
@bookaholic213 Sorry it took me so long to reply I just recently started a new job and it's been hectic. Anyway I have edited the first bit and took your critique into consideration. Do you think it sounds better now? and it DID help :) thank you!
CreativeCooki CreativeCooki Apr 25, 2012
Hmm...I really don't know what to say. Well, your description was done terrifically, so kudos on that part. I don't really have much to say since it's only a prologue; your story so far sounds well-written. Anyway, I'm voting!
IlseVrensburg IlseVrensburg Mar 18, 2012
@bookaholic213 Hi I just finished editing everything and I tired taking your advice and fixing up the rest of chapter one as well, I will work on the next chapters later. I just wanted to ask so that i can fix it, what exactly is confusing?
StoryGirl5169 StoryGirl5169 Mar 10, 2012
Loved it! reading this makes me wanna read more. I  really like your characters too. Voted
StoryGirl5169 StoryGirl5169 Mar 10, 2012
Wow the beginning was amazing. There was of lot of detail and that's really good. Overall this story is great and it deserves a vote