Dimension Turners

Dimension Turners

265 Reads 24 Votes 4 Part Story
Hopi Butler By Hopi_Butler Updated Mar 20, 2012

The worlds are in chaos, and only one organization can stop the evil from spreading: The Dimension Turners. Now there's a new girl, and Ryne finds her lacking. Will she be the Chosen One, or has the computer truly made a mistake?

  • dimension
  • dimensions
  • organization
  • organizations
  • teenagers
  • teens
  • turner
  • turners
AbigailTheAmazing AbigailTheAmazing Mar 15, 2012
Short, but sweet, and really good. Ryne seems like he will be an intriguing character. I like plots like this where people are trained for a specific reason.
                              
                              Off to read more:)
DeeDee_w DeeDee_w Mar 14, 2012
Brilliant, very brilliant way of writing..I love the way you started the story, it's intriguing, captivating and eye-catching if you'd permit me to say.. Well done
thetalkingpen thetalkingpen Mar 11, 2012
Nice attention grabbing start. You gave enough to get my interest .  
                              
                              "Put a gun to her head?"  Donovan sighed shaking his head. (this makes it look like Donovan said that maybe try
                              
                              "Put a gun to her head?"
                              
                              Donovan sighed shaking his head. "That's not willingly."
LiddySykes LiddySykes Mar 11, 2012
LOLLL the last sentence :D 
                              I don't like Ryne... he can't judge a person by her looks D=<
                              Anyways, I really enjoyed reading this :D
                              *Voted* Off to the next chappie.... ;)
Hopi_Butler Hopi_Butler Mar 11, 2012
@MusicalRain I'd love it if you made a cover :) And thanks for the input, ya'll. I'll make sure to work on it a little bit more.
- - Mar 10, 2012
This is such a great idea!:) I love the storyline, the characters, everything. Great job. Keep up the great work!:)