The City of the Sick

The City of the Sick

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livAlittle By livAlittle Completed

I was there when they dragged my best friend away. I was there on the front step, tears silently streaming down my face, as I watched Mark struggle against the Guards. I was there when they announced his deportation over the loudspeakers. I was there when they banished him to the City of the Sick, but I wasn't there for the last person that was important to me. They had taken away everyone: my mother, my father, my friends, but they crossed the line when they took away Mark. He was all I had left, and he's gone. And now my city is in a state of turmoil. We were all in over our heads.

  • city
  • dystopia
  • dystopian
  • novel
  • part
  • section
  • short
  • sick
  • story
  • three
  • two
NadiaHambali NadiaHambali Mar 24, 2012
I don't quite like self introducing at the beginning. not that I'm saying the story is bad, I'm just stating my opinion.
                              
                              In fact, you wrote this nicely and describe this nicely too :)
mahbubam mahbubam Mar 19, 2012
Great chapter. You are pretty good with descriptions. And transitioning from one event to the other is also smooth. Very good flow to your writing. I don't notice any grammatical errors or typos here so good job on that.
olivia9498 olivia9498 Mar 18, 2012
This was amazing!  I like how you created an original world for the book to take place in.  Very creative!