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The Dragon's Throne

The Dragon's Throne

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EmilyLK By EmilyLK Completed

**The Dragon's Song | Book One**
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  When Cori - a human-born servant - begins having vivid and disturbing dreams of dragons, she discovers a talent that has always been jealously guarded by the wealthy and influential. Her new-found skills are not without their hazards; Cori is thrown into a world well above her status and not only must she fight for her place in this new life, but she also finds herself fighting for her life against the dragons of her nightmares.
    And to complicate matters, The Karalis has taken an interest in Cori's new talents, which could prove to be the most dangerous development of all.

This was very well done. Normally prologues have become cliche or unnecessary, but this one was done really well. Very creative.
ZoeMcNeill0 ZoeMcNeill0 Apr 26
Not a bad start. Could be stronger, but the follow up works well to cover it. Consider condensing the language here, so the sentences bear more weight. Perhaps something about a 'self-told prophecy' in the final sentence?
                              Typo- no period- after the second sentence
Well that's a great way to start a story, wow! I'm already hooked :D
ZoeMcNeill0 ZoeMcNeill0 Apr 26
At this point, I don't think we trust the narrator enough to trust their judgement on this. This statement would mean more if we knew a little more about the voice telling the story.
ZoeMcNeill0 ZoeMcNeill0 Apr 26
My advice for this and the following paragraphs is show, don't tell. It's a rule more for narrative than exposition, but I feel it would add a lot here
Ariador Ariador Oct 16, 2016
Great story, might I suggest you to read a few of my stories too?