On His Leash (On Exteme Hold)

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Nicole By fantasy343 Updated 2 years ago
Being the daughter of a man hated by her entire pack isn't exactly a life wanted by anyone. Most girls would crack under the constant glares, smart remarks, insults, and hateful things done to her, but not Savannah White. She forces herself to stay strong and not let anyone knock her down. But, when her place is now at the bottom of the pack rather than nearing the top as it once was, her high held attitude does not help to get her back on the good side of the pack. However, she could not care less about what they think of her as long as she retains her pride and dignity. 
    
    Then again, who's to say that can't be taken from her as well? When Savannah becomes of age for the mating run and tries to escape all of the lustful men dying to sink their teeth into her and claim her for their own, will she end up running into the paws of someone worse than she could ever imagine? Can she manage to hold up and stay strong even in the worst of situations? Or will she crumble to the ground with no one to help her piece herself back together?
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    This story is on a huge hold! I have lost my connection with the story, feeling like it's an early work of mine that needs to I've fully rewrote before I can finish it. I plan to do this one day! I'll be fixing up the plot and giving far more foreshadowing now that I know what I want to do with it. My apologizes for leaving my readers hanging.
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?
@lterryy Thank you for all of the advice : ). I will defiantly go through and put those all to use within my chapters. I do tend to describe eyes first mainly because that is the first thing that I notice in reality. 
                                    
                                    You made sense as far as the "I allowed my dark blue eyes..." part, but I do have a question about it. Considering that we are writing in a manner that no one ever fully considers. Like, I would not consider someone's arm to be bony and pale, but I would describe it that way in text from the girl's POV. So, since I normally wouldn't do that in person, why would I bother doing it in text beyond to give the reader a chance to see what I would see? Do I have to stick her somewhere with a mirror for someone to know what Savannah looks like at all then?