Sightless

Sightless

350 Reads 13 Votes 1 Part Story
Kenya D By lynkel Updated Feb 29, 2012

Memory Carter died the day her sister did. She lost her hopes, her dreams, and most importantly of all her sight. Then, she meets Chase and she decides maybe, she should move on. But moving on comes with a price, and when she finally trusts Chase. He hits her with breathtaking news: she isn't normal, but then again she never has been being the only Native American girl in her small island school. But what Chase tells her about her family's past isn't something she can run from.

lynkel lynkel May 29, 2013
@MiniMoxx Thank you so much! This is the old-unedited version too. :D
- - May 24, 2012
Wow! It's really deeply illustrated - I could see everything in my mind. I love your writing style, and the short, sweet sentences that do way more for your story than any long descriptive sentence ever could. You have a great beginning! Great job!! :D
MiniMoxx MiniMoxx Mar 02, 2012
I remember this now! haha.
                              Really, really good and intriguing. I love the name Memory, and her strong and unique personality that comes across.
                              For a first draft, this is really well done, and I didn't see any errors that immediately struck me, so well done!
AnnaNoel AnnaNoel Mar 01, 2012
There is no more!!!!!! I'm upset :( lol. Can't wait for there to be more though!
lynkel lynkel Feb 29, 2012
@Chocolate_Luv  Thank you. It's the formatting of this website also, on my word processor it looks much better.
LiddySykes LiddySykes Feb 29, 2012
The way you describe things is awesome :)
                              Maybe you could seperate some paragraphs into smaller ones..? :D
                              And some of the paragraphs are indented and others are not :D
                              (Sorry for being so picky :S)
                              But other than that, I like it <3