Pack warrior

Pack warrior

275K Reads 8.7K Votes 41 Part Story
Angelica By angelica20000 Completed

Lily is the warrior of the "Dark moon" pack. She is the daughter of the alpha the only child of the alpha.She was suppose to be alpha but turned it down because she liked being top warrior and mostly in control during fights and training.Her cousin Stephen is now alpha with her parents gone.Now the alpha sends her off to be with another pack for safety. Will she meet her mate?Will she be happy?Most of all will she be safe?read to find out.

bubblee96 bubblee96 Dec 20, 2015
Literally cannot even make it past the first page because of spelling and grammar issues, might want to clean this up a bit!!!!
DisGraceful___ DisGraceful___ Jun 19, 2014
I really like the way you started this story, but I really do think a little more details and descriptions would make it a little better and a little longer! Great chapter though!
DisGraceful___ DisGraceful___ Jun 19, 2014
this sounds like a really good story! Cant wait to get started
salmasey salmasey May 31, 2014
I liked it. It was a bit too cliche but nevertheless it was good.
Aqierra Aqierra Apr 06, 2014
@angelica2000, I think you have a good start so far. The only thing I would say to do is go into more details, so that it would make the story seem a little longer, and it also seem like your story isn't going in a fast paste. But in overall you have a good first start. Keep up the good work.