A Perfect Utopia?

A Perfect Utopia?

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XxTheDarkAngelxX By XxTheDarkAngelxX Completed

Which part of you childhood had been real, and which part implanted?
What if all that had just happened was a test, and you were failing miserably at it?
What if your whole life had just been an experiment? 
What if  you yourself was nothing but an experiment?
Utopia. The world where everything has to be "Perfect" as deemed by those above you.
But you never have a  say in how things turn out.

Domini Jetson is 15. Her best friends have commited  suicide, knowing that they couldn't handle the pressures that their society has put on them.
She was supposed to be next. Then she was kidnapped by the F.B.O.P., or the government. Now, she has to be questioned.She questions everything she has ever known.
What if you were never as free as you thought you were?
What if everything was just a joke?

And this is where the S.U.I.C.I.D.E.R.S. come in. They are a group of people who have dedicated their lives to letting people live the life that they have always wanted to: without laws on how they should act.
But in the final battle, who will you stand by? The people who think they are trying to make your life better, or the people who you have grown up with?

  • 217
  • aliyah
  • assistant
  • boss
  • domini
  • elders
  • escape
  • fbop
  • interrogation
  • interrogator
  • jetson
  • lab
  • labs
  • laviia
  • lavinia
  • mrs
  • mystery
  • past
  • perfect
  • phone
  • pride
  • rebell
  • secrets
  • silence
  • statement
  • utopia
  • vesper
  • watched
squishyJhope squishyJhope Apr 02, 2015
Considering this is your first story I highly doubt that someone else who writes a book like this would be charged 150k... Probably copy and pasted it off google :P
XxTheDarkAngelxX XxTheDarkAngelxX May 01, 2013
                              Alright, thank you so much for the feedback. It is really appreciated!
CRScott CRScott May 01, 2013
Very cool. Easy reading with an impressive writing style. I love your vocabulary, it makes sentences flow and transition to the next. The flashback sort of took me off guard, however; I think if you keep the flashbacks consistent, it will work.
Astridx Astridx Oct 24, 2012
@XxTheDarkAngelxX Kind of. I was thinking you could just have the flashback as a prologue, but that was only a suggestion. You could also keep it in this chapter but try and make the transition a little bit smoother.
XxTheDarkAngelxX XxTheDarkAngelxX Oct 22, 2012
                              Thanks so much for that!
                              And for the flashback, you mean the part with the Boss right? So I could just have his part in the prologue and have him think something like,' He thought back to the day when he was first assigned to this job..." or something like that?
XxTheDarkAngelxX XxTheDarkAngelxX Oct 18, 2012
                              Thanks so mcuh, and I definitely love your story too! I love the genre- I never realized what I was looking for until I found it. CHeesy, huh?
                              Also, I've found that there're always really hard to get into sci-fi books...So I decided to try writing my own! Haha