Don't Go.

Don't Go.

869 Reads 14 Votes 1 Part Story
lisajoy87 By lisajoy87 Completed

A very short story, inspired by the cover picture.

DragonOfSapphire DragonOfSapphire Mar 09, 2012
Wow. That ending just seemed powerful.
                              I see so much more that could come from this story and I wish it would continue.
                              
                              The last thing she screamed just made everything make sense and astonishing.
suraisu suraisu Mar 02, 2012
I love the way you wrote this. Great choice of words, it kept my attention the whole time. I enjoyed the slight suspense of the moment when Toby was about to fall. Well done. c:
green_eyed_robin87 green_eyed_robin87 Feb 28, 2012
I have to say I am not really a fan of short stories simply because they dont tell you enough! But...I really like this. I think it is a little stiff at points and needs (as rboy03) says to have more 'feeling' but it's good overall, a very neat endeavour :)
YoungMum04 YoungMum04 Feb 28, 2012
Wow... This is great I'd love to read more :D. I can't believe he let go his a fool but I guess she now knows how much he really loved her ;(  ;( poor Gabi.
DramaFreak DramaFreak Feb 28, 2012
Awh! This is terrible! Wait, that sounded wrong.. You're writing isn't terrible, the story itself is terrible and sad and... wow, that sounded even worse! I hope you understand what I mean! Poor Gabi, I totally understand what she means. That boy is a dummie! I loved this, good job! :) xx