A God's Dilemma

A God's Dilemma

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Rose By green_eyed_robin87 Updated Feb 27, 2012

What happens to the Gods when people no longer fall in love? Amorel, Goddess of love has disappeared and the human race has stopped falling for one another, without love it could die out all together leaving the Gods with no one to believe in them. It falls to the haphazard Strato Precipitato, God of drizzle to mentor a new Goddess, how will he fair when his normal Godly business is in tatters as it is!?

lisajoy87 lisajoy87 Feb 28, 2012
From what I remember it was mainly just some comma's and rewording. There are sentences that would flow a lot better if you changed a word.
                              
                              There are quite a few run-on sentences that need to have a comma before the word 'and' in them.
green_eyed_robin87 green_eyed_robin87 Feb 28, 2012
@lisajoy87 Thanks for the feedback, any chance you can be a bit more specific as to what you think I should edit...?
lisajoy87 lisajoy87 Feb 28, 2012
I found this story hard to follow to be honest. It also didn't really capture my interest must but it doesn't seem like the kind of story I usually go for so that could be why. 
                              
                              This story also needs a lot of editing if you plan to continue with it - just so you are aware.