Taste so Bitter But Coated With Sugar

Taste so Bitter But Coated With Sugar

51 Reads 3 Votes 4 Part Story
Linian21 By Linian21 Updated Mar 01, 2012

Naomi thought she had her life together. But one thing happen and everything changes for her. Leaving her life behind, she lives to be successful. Independent was all she need. No friends, no boyfriend, just her and her life. Not until she meets handsome boy Bryson Cruz, whom she will have to partner up with. How will Bryson bring Naomi to see that life isn't all about her? (Sorry...description isn't good. Making this story up as it goes. Isn't laid down to how it will be...More exciting that way)

Please vote and leave comments on what you think about this so i know if i should continue it or not. Thanks. Hope you enjoy.

joecool123 joecool123 Feb 29, 2012
This was pretty good. you have a good mix of dialogue and description which is good because that really helps with the flow of the piece. I think your idea is really interesting too. it's so true to everyone haha. nice work :)
101twilightlover 101twilightlover Feb 29, 2012
It is a good idea so far, and its not bad for a first story either. Its good :)