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The freaking zombie apocalypse. (Boyxboy)

The freaking zombie apocalypse. (Boyxboy)

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Peter Parker By WickedSpider Updated Dec 22, 2015

Roderick is an unlucky 17 years old guy with an uncanny ability of finding survivors in the zombie apocalypse. He tried to survive alone which is not an easy task. That is until he meets a certain survivor who doesn't seem to be taking the apocalypse seriously. Still, Roderick sticks around because somehow, they're still alive.

Hello, I will be walking through this and doing my best to help you. First order of business, capitalize the title.
Good job on this one, sympathizing like this shows what we wanna see.
na,nana/na,nana. na.
                              *zombie moan*
                              na,nana/na,nana. na.
                              *zombie moan*
                              quoted by "shawn of the Dead" XD
bloodmix bloodmix Jun 19
He probably lost his mind already and if he doesn't like his sister wouldn't it be too cruel and like he said, emotions usually get in the way best if you leave them for the mean time. Maybe he could find a cure.
Again, have him show emotion. If he hates his sister, show satisfaction in her death. give the character personality, not just some person whos just trying to survive. Theres more to humanity than just surviving!
Little insensitive, consider changing the wording. Remember, the dude just lost his parents. Unless he hated his parents, he should still have a bit of an attachment.