The Other Is Gold [On Hold]

The Other Is Gold [On Hold]

26 Part Story 12.4K Reads 409 Votes
Maria By xxxMariri555 Updated Nov 01, 2012

In every girl's life, there is that one boy that changes everything. That one boy that makes food taste better, music sound better, and reality seem like a fairytale. For Scarlet Caraway, that one boy was Nate. That was until he moved all the way across the world. Now, it's been two years and their love for each other has faded away...or so she thought. Scarlet has moved on with a new boyfriend, new friends, and a new whole. Everything was going perfect until that one day where Nate shows up unexpectedly at her front door. Now, Scarlet was choose who her heart really belongs to. Her once loved boyfriend, Nate, or her jocky new boyfriend- Ben.  Who will she choose? And more importantly, how far will the boys go to get Scarlet's heart?

Oh my gosh. The beginning was so cute. I love romantic stuff especially when it's cheesy. This sounds really good and was a great prologue! Love it!
Melody_Lee Melody_Lee Sep 03, 2012 04:16PM
The beginning is so romantic. I like cheesy stuff, LOL. Anyway it was a good start. :)
ravenclaw17 ravenclaw17 Sep 03, 2012 03:58PM
ooh this is good I want to know more about it like why Nate left in the first place. This is deffinately very good :D
hellodearie hellodearie Jul 15, 2012 06:08PM
Wo, you are very talented at writing romance! I'm crap for the record, so I guess it makes me easy to impress, but it's still great! I love your title, that intrigues me a lot and your last paragraph does also. I have no critisms with this so I am voting xD
xxxMariri555 xxxMariri555 Jul 15, 2012 06:07PM
@Raiderette55 Thanks(:
                                    
                                    @ILurveReading And yeah, I know. I think my akwardness in general has caught up into my writing lol
ILurveReading ILurveReading Jul 15, 2012 05:59PM
Okay good start. Your description is decent, but I noticed some awkward phrasing. You might think about proofreading beforehand. (Sorry if it's too harsh) Anyways, if you fix that, it's good.