The Kept

The Kept

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B.D. Land By BDLand Updated 4 days ago

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For decades, the kingdoms of Ithaam, Tiarmn, Haolaetia, and Cerebes have maintained peace by staging arena-scale battles to settle disputes before they can escalate to all-out war. The arenas, known as esidiems, house and train apprentices hoping to join the ranks of their kingdom's Kept warriors.
      
      When her initiation into Ithaam's Esidiem is disrupted by the kingdom's handsome crown prince, an apprentice finds herself suddenly caught between royal brothers and thrust into the center of a power struggle that could change the fate of the four kingdoms forever.

MeiSummer MeiSummer Jun 14
*as the apothecary
                              *had short, wiry gray hair 
                              
                              I think there's no need to hyphenate eyeglasses :)
Oh god, he has epilepsy (or is having seizures due to other problems of the illness). Sad thing was that in medieval times it was pretty common to mistake epilepsy for witchcraft and/or demonic possession.
BDLand BDLand Jun 06
Thanks! I write in Scrivenr and then copy/paste to wattpad and lose my formatting. I try to catch most of it, but there is a lot that gets messed up and I just don't notice. Extra eyes really help!
                              
                              That last paragraph is describing her mother holding Errol. I will have to make that more clear.
FanyPi FanyPi Jun 15
I liked this chapter so far, but I am confused ... I thought the baby is dying like now, and then Nerys mentions that she can come back in a few years? I think I would like to see a little more detail on your second part with the whole seizure scenes, like Nerys' thoughts and acts.
MeiSummer MeiSummer Jun 14
:O :O :O I know this is common in those times, but I'm still shocked every time!
MeiSummer MeiSummer Jun 14
She's really selling her nephew hard! :) I hope he's as good as she says he is! <3