I love you, you love me. So why is this so complicated?

I love you, you love me. So why is this so complicated?

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ILY1234567 By ILY1234567 Updated Apr 10, 2011

Alaina was living a perfect life. She had everything anyone could ask for. Her parents where rich and they had the biggest house in the area. Alaina's parents don't like the house because it's to big and they are never home so they decide to move without telling Alaina, her older brother Cole, and her younger sister Rachelle. Alaina, being as stubborn as she is, doesn't want to move away from her school and her friends. Or so she say's she has fallen in love with this guy that just moved to her school and doesn't want to leave. Alaina decides to buy a house of her own and live there. The only house for sale in the area is an old victorian house about ten blocks away from her school. She falls in love with the house the moment she see's it, but nothing is as it seems. The house has a pretty creepy and distubing past. What is that past? Whatt does Alaina find? The best question is what happens to Alaina?

Shadows-Smile Shadows-Smile Apr 30, 2011
It's a cool idea xD  I like the idea of her being a cheerleader, but not actually liking the pressure :) Plus the horror element is brilliant :D Dima x
ACRL37 ACRL37 Apr 30, 2011
Nice opening, and the plot seems very interesting. I agree with Panda-hime, there's some errors with grammar in there so maybe re-edit it but it's a very good start! 
Lovable_El Lovable_El Apr 30, 2011
I suggest you edit this again, make the chapters longer, and that's it! Awesome chapter and had my eyes glued to it.
xsnickerss xsnickerss Apr 30, 2011
Cute first chapter and great cliffhanger, I really want to go onto the next chapter so I can see who it is but I figured I'd comment first. So awesomeeee cliffhanger!!