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Ocular Rift

Ocular Rift

261 Reads 47 Votes 31 Part Story
BKlein By BrianKleinNYC Updated 4 days ago

In Central, citizens are divided by version. Immersives, like Hana, rank highest among them. With her Birthseed implant finally online, she's fast-tracked to enter the tech elite and a world of digital, mixed reality. 

When painful headaches and disturbing visions appear that she can't control, Hana's training grinds to a dangerous halt. She grows suspicious about everything she's taken for granted after an anonymous figure warns her that her immersions are more prison than palace. 

Convinced there must be more to her digitally-enhanced life she's drawn into an illicit world of off-lining. There she discovers the lies that have kept her safe and the ones that threaten everything she knows.

I really like how it starts - a strong and intriguing first paragraph which really makes me want to read on.
Riveting and unique. I really like your writing style! A strong first chapter.