Relentless Emotion

Relentless Emotion

345 Reads 32 Votes 4 Part Story
H.C. Townes By HCTownes Completed

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- - Dec 04, 2017
That's a perfect opening! Did you mean to leave 'sun' lowercase, though? If it's the Spring sun being personified rather than just Spring, than you can make it Spring Sun.
- - Dec 04, 2017
'Skin' and 'kiss' both have have the same 'ih' sound which creates assonance. I've seen that a couple times so far in your work, and I've always loved assonance in poetry. It adds a nice sense of uniformity without coming off as forced.
- - Dec 04, 2017
I love this whole poem, but especially these lines. I don't know, they just work so well together.