The December Children

The December Children

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luna By tranquilstars Completed

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Ellie is sixteen years old. She does not have a last name, she has never felt it rain in her skin, and she cannot tell you the name of the city she lives in. 

Instead, Ellie has Mum, Dad, and her five siblings. Inside the house, they have books, films, artwork, and school. The family has everything one could ever want, until, one day, it is not enough. 

It is then that Ellie must decide if the outside world could be what she believes it might, or face the consequences of staying in the place she knows is a safe haven, a place that her family is outgrowing by the minute.

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smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 05
This was clear and easy to visualize. Nice job! Small thing...I think her chin is propped up on her elbows, not in them.
smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 05
This was confusing. It took me a few rereads to understand that you're implying Issac will immediately tell on Ronan and then they'll get in trouble, all of which will happen in the future. Maybe make that clearer, if I interpreted correctly?
 #BlankSheets 'My head is leaning' feels a little bit too clunky. Maybe: 'I lean my head[...]' instead?
 #BlankSheets I think you've got a typo here, it should be 'Mum likes to say that when[...]' rather than: 'Mum likes to say then when[...]'.
nadar_vivir nadar_vivir Sep 12
I guess I'm the only person who likes how pecuilar it is. I don't know if that's what you're going for, but it feels like a lopsided smile and hope that is weirdly darkly innocent. I don't know how else to describe, but I personally found no wrong in how you wrote this.
 #BlankSheets Did you mean 'little ones' rather than the 'littles'?