For the Love of Lacey

For the Love of Lacey

19 Part Story 4.1K Reads 104 Votes
ndgobl00 By ndgobl00 Completed

Lacey and Latham are twins that are just hoping to get a glimpse of the new guy moving into the haunted house on the hill. He's rumored to be related to the original owner who was thought to be a witch. Why is he so attracted to Lacey and why can he only come out at night, and who are the friends he has living with him? Can Turner compete with this guy, and will Deputy Dawg ever give Lacey a ticket for speeding? These answers and more can be found within the confines of this story. Enjoy!

ndgobl00 ndgobl00 Mar 17, 2012 01:15PM
For just taking a half hour you've done some good work. And I haven't tried writing with anyone else because usually if someone else reads what I've written I stop writing. I actually didn't this time, though, so maybe I've grown some in my ability.
ndgobl00 ndgobl00 Mar 16, 2012 07:54PM
Just between you, me and the wall, I've been writing since I was 7 and haven't gotten much better. I'm eagerly awaiting some of your work on site.
@ndgobl00 Haha you're welcome! I'm new to this website, but I'm all over the place with writing. And you know what? That's what editors are for! You could be a professional with a few years practice ;)
ndgobl00 ndgobl00 Mar 16, 2012 05:04PM
OMG!! An honest-to-God comment! Thank You!!! And I agree with what you say, and that's actually after I went through and tried to correct all the tense issues. That's why I'm not a professional writer. I'm just happy to get it all down.
Hmm I admittedly enjoyed it, but you have to watch your tense a bit. Kind of th subject-verb agreement. (on the second page) also, develop your characters a bit more. Over all, I am definitely interested in reading more!