The shadow of death is about when a girl is celebrating the new year with her family in london there watching the firework display and all goes well untill she gets on the bus to go home...
I'm not really a fan of horror stories, though may take your story as an exception. *Voted*
Once again, very original idea! There are the same issues as your other story, and this one was a little confusing. I would proofread then go back and edit. Good job though!
I really like the whole story line, but it's a bit confusing..You should get more into detail (:
You should definitely be more descriptive here, because this could turn out to be a really, REALLY good story.
You also need to do some proofreading, there are spelling and grammar errors that you need to go in and fix.
It's a bit confusing in the beginning since I don't know why they're there, but I like that it's original and I would like for you to keep going since I wanna know more the purpose of this story! Anyway great start to keep us curious! :)
pretty good so far but it is a lil confuseing on the bus part and the parents crying but other than that i liked it