Hi, this is a review for kitkatchoco123 's book; "The Perfect Guy"
I really like the first book (this is a sequel) called "Middle School Love". I think the ending really finished it off and it made it into a good story over all.
I think "The Perfect Guy" could use more story line. Try coming up with more events that could make the book better (i guess?).
I know it sucks to write them, but adding in conflicts between Leon and Violetta could actually make it better👍 it doesn't have to be a "perfect" relationship. Also, besides the dialogue, you could also add more descriptive words.
(Hard to explain) I know you're writing the book in script style but maybe instead of just them talking to each other you could write sentences in between of what they are doing during talking.
>Add Cliffhangers👌 that's my #1 advice, I don't know why😂
I don't really know how to say this without sounding weird. Just try to make each chapter your best and use as much descriptions of scenes as you can because most people like to read those kinds of things😌👍
Keep writing! 😍 And I think you should also use more of the new characters you gave out roles to👌 *WINK*😉
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A lot of my reviews will look somewhat like this.. Sorry if it's confusing, I'm clearly not an expert at writing reviews 😂🌸
💁~Mayma
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