The cover looks great. Just maybe consider making the title a bit bigger as it occupies too
little space on the cover and a bit hard to read.
Description / Summary: 7/10
There's not much to work with on the summary / description of the story but I could guess it'll
involve a loveless marriage or at least one-sided love. Maybe add a bit of detail/tease or
rework it so that the summary introduces something different and be more interesting than
all the other books on that niche.
Chapter Review: 7/10
I have read the book up to Chapter 11 but will only go into detail on the first three. Overall,
grammar and punctuation need work the most. Please consider adding a bit more
description/detail to your scenes (setting, movement, mood, etc.) so readers could get a
clearer picture of what's happening.
The present situation and the main character's feelings were established clearly. Just one
thing, I think I didn't come across the reason the main character was married off to V? I think
it would help readers understand more of the characters actions if we know why. Also, try to
avoid using the same words in a sentence as it sounds redundant. For example, the word
"happened" in the first sentence of the chapter. There are also some mistakes with regards
to grammar and punctuation.
This chapter is good. Just a bit spelling mistake and punctuation omission here and there but
nothing major. I just like to point out that the first time I read this chapter, I was kinda
confused with regards to how fast the main girl's mood changed. She was sad then numb
then was laughing the next second then sad then bored. It took me the second time to catch
up and picture the scenario clearly.
Again, grammar and punctuation. Also, the scene in the living room with the main girl and
JJK. I think "unstoppable laughter" was a bit much. They were laughing until they were
teary-eyed as per your description. I suggest mellowing it down. The main girl also walked
away without even saying "excuse me" to the other person.
Main Characters: 10/10
A perfect score for this one because of how consistent you have written/described/created
their personalities! I was surprised! It wasn't like the other books I've read (with similar
storyline) where the characters become ooc at some point. Even when the main girl was too
weak for my liking during certain moments, I just can't hate it as it was faithful to who she is.
And Jungkook! You were also faithful to the image you have created for his character in the
first fews chapters up to where I've read. Love it!
Activity of the Writer: 8/10
The author replies to some feedback/comments on the story as well as on her conversation
The plot is good. It's cliche as the author have admitted in an author's note but nonetheless,
interesting. There are parts where a person outside of the fandom might get confused (party
scene where the members were there) but still. Just one point that is not clear to me is the
tile and the story? What are the lies? And what's the mistake? (I deeply apologize if I missed
it. Or maybe I have yet to get to that point?)
Work on your grammar and punctuation. Adding more detail to your descriptions would be
This is just my opinion. A single person's point of view. Please know that the things I pointed
out are not flat out negativity but rooms for improvement. Also, please feel free to ask
questions if you have any. Thank you for trusting me!
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