• what lies beyond •

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What Lies Beyond
by BodyInTheWall

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So... the first thing I'd like to say about this book is that it's EXTREMELY well written. The author has a clear, definitive style, which makes his work very enjoyable. This book was only a short story, but he has written several other books, so I'd recommend you check them out.

 This book was only a short story, but he has written several other books, so I'd recommend you check them out

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The first thing I liked was the cover. Yes, you read that right- I liked it. Clearly it has gone majorly wrong during editing, because it's all blurred, which only adds to the appeal. It contrasts with the neat mind of OCD-riddled Ben, the main character, which I think worked really well.

I think, if you used a proper editing app such as Canva, or hired the services of a Cover Shop on Wattpad, you could make a really professional cover using the blurred idea.

I think, if you used a proper editing app such as Canva, or hired the services of a Cover Shop on Wattpad, you could make a really professional cover using the blurred idea

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The blurb, as pictured above, was absolutely perfect. I personally suck at blurbs, so well done for this! It just draws you into the book, but not so much that you know what's going to happen, just enough so that you're prepared and (I admit) quite excited.

 I personally suck at blurbs, so well done for this! It just draws you into the book, but not so much that you know what's going to happen, just enough so that you're prepared and (I admit) quite excited

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So... the beginning of the book started off relatively normal. The writing was captivating and imaginative, and I liked how there were absolutely no mistakes, which was obviously a huge plus.

I thought the normality of the book was clever, since it made Ben, the main character, very relatable. His mum and him were just ordinary, not special in any way. The OCD just slotted in as part of his life, and didn't seem menacing at all. I liked how you foreshadowed it becoming a problem, with the reference to how it had previously made him later to school.

All in all, I have no criticism with the start of the book, because it's clearly written very well and if I hadn't just been reviewing it anyway, I would have definitely continued to read it.

All in all, I have no criticism with the start of the book, because it's clearly written very well and if I hadn't just been reviewing it anyway, I would have definitely continued to read it

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But here's where I have my criticism. In only these places and once or twice more after, there's a lack of commas before you close the speech marks, which did irritate me, although other readers probably wouldn't notice.

Also, towards the end of the book I didn't really like how things moved really fast, as the beginning of the book was a lot more drawn out; one day was written to be longer than the next three weeks. It seemed ever so slightly rushed.

The twist, although I don't want to include spoilers, was also quite rushed. In all honesty I think you could make a proper fleshed-out book from this, as the main concept and fantastic writing is all there. I think it has great potential.

Finally, I loved the last paragraph

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Finally, I loved the last paragraph. I liked the rhetorical questions and how graphic it was, and unexpected too. It had a dark ending, so different from the beginning, which I liked. The impact of "He knows." also worked very well.

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All in all, I would definitely recommend checking out BodyInTheWall, as he's clearly a strong writer and is profile is full of dark but wonderful gems :)

Reviewed by EmmaEverAfter

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