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This...

So.. A couple of days ago, I was having an extremely rough day at school. And suddenly, I blacked out during my math class. When I returned back to normal, I found a paper on my desk that was covered with my handwriting. As I observed it closer and read it, it truly scared me. There was there was terrible things written on it, although the brutal descriptions and the flow of the piece was great. I just.. want to know what you guys think about it, 'cause I want to improve my writing skills and make better stories. :)

All I saw was red before I finally did it...

My teeth bared and it felt as if the entirety of my eyes had turned black and sinful. The skin on my body seemed to crawl with excitement and all of the hairs on my arms stood up as I threw my fist back. Clenching my jaw, I launched my fist forward powerfully against her stupid face. The flesh felt good underneath my knuckles and I sneered when I heard the glorious, deafening crunch come from her jaw. She began to stumble backward, screaming in both pain and surprise. I simply smirked and grabbed her by the hair tightly, slamming my knee into her left temple a couple of times before I let go. She hunched over, pitifully grasping the side of her bloodied face, crying. I chuckled to myself softly, admiring her now beaten and much prettier face...

"...guess you should've been honest and loyal then, huh...?"

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