hi there, I was wondering if you wernt too busy, you could check out some of my storieS? Id love any feedback what so ever you could give me!! lol ....if you like vampires, I have INNOCENT EYES, BLOOD THIRSTY, and BLOOD ANGELS.
as for a normal teen romance with some secrets, check out HUSH :D please and thank you in advance <3
maybe combine some sentences into paragraphs, just so the story flows more. Blood Thirsty **on hold** good dialogue Innocent Eyes maybe try describing the emotions more than whats physically going on Hush **on hold** Italicize thoughts, you have very strong imagery Blood Angels **on hold** just maybe adjust the phrasing on the line "Through life and death..." its a bit too long i think to go with your other phrasing. Poems