@YuffieProductions You're welcome! Hey, take your time working on it - I mean, you're working on, what, at least two other projects at the same time? And having three chapters plotted out is more than I ever do! lol
Yeah I figured it was something like that. I've done that before, which is why for right now I'm sorta sticking to first because all the stories I've worked on recently have been in first, and it takes work to force yourself back to third. First is way more natural.
Thanks so much for the comment! ^___^ I really want to work on this. I really only have the first three chapters plotted out, though... Not sure what I'm going to do with the rest of the story.
Oo thanks! Darn, I'm so used to writing in 1st person.... This is my first attempt at 3rd.
Oo thank you for the suggestions! I'll add them to the list.
Hey all! I've posted my first story on here just a little bit ago. It's for my Fiction Writing class and would love as much feedback as I can get. Any and all comments, suggestions, ideas are welcome!
Thanks! And wish you all luck with your own writing!
@YuffieProductions You're welcome. I'm very lazy by nature so I really need to work hard to fight that, because I keep coming up with idea that I want to write. I also read some of the "Stick with a story" chapter and found some of that enlightening as well since that's another one of my problems. Though, I feel the root of all my issues is my laziness so once I fight that I should be extremely better off lol
Haha it's okay. Just thought I'd give a suggestion that could potentially help.
@southpawstar o.o And I did not see your reply! I'm so sorry! I will definitely add that in. Thank you!
Thank you for the comment! ^__^ I'm very happy to hear it was motivating. I kind of wrote it as a reminder to myself, too. I'm trying so hard to make TGL perfect, that I'm afraid to write it now. Though it's not the 1st draft... It's like the 100th draft and the 4th rewrite... :P
Now I'm stuck with a plot hole, so I have to start over again. >.< This story just doesn't want to get written!
@YuffieProductions You are welcome! :)
Okay, I understand. Maybe you could just add a line like "My wall starts to crack a bit..." or "I sensed my lighthearted mood calming down Cleon as my emotions snuck past my wall" If you can just add one line like that, the idea will be presented without you needing too much explanation. Just a thought.
Thanks so much for the comment!
Ooo I didn't explain the mental connection well enough. I'll have to go back and work on that. Thanks for letting me know!
She did close him off from her thoughts, but her emotions are still leaking through. Also, Cleon's mind is open, so Kairi can hear his thoughts. x( It's hard to write. They have to concentrate to keep the mental wall up, so once their thoughts start wandering too much, the wall will gain "cracks", and bits of their minds will leak through.