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Description: In the brutal world of battleboxing, Imalroc sacrificed years to become an unbeatable champion. But his will to fight vanishes when he learns that he will never earn his freedom from the deadly sport, and he begins his own private rebellion against...

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smaoineamh commented on Imalroc - Chapter One: Sold

Hellooooo again! I'm so glad you're reading this one...I'm excited about its potential! I have A TON of fantasy stories kicking around my brain, just waiting for me to fill in enough of the plot holes. I love Tenebria way too much, but I feel like I'm not skilled enough to write it the way I want to yet. But I will get to it! Hopefully!!

Good continuation of the story! I think you did a really, really great job of making Kaya seem more grown up and sounding just a little bit different from when we were first introduced to her. She has a strong voice, but I think you have to pay closer attention to staying with it. Sometimes the phrasing doesn't sound like something a sixteen year old would say. For example, when she's says "No one knew him, but I"...I found it jarring. It doesn't sound like its coming out of the mouth of a teenage girl. 
      There were a few instances in this chapter that distracted me from being fully absorbed in the story. To me, the cousins sending her coal for Christmas just makes them come across as too evil to be real people. I also was confused by the line "Luke wasn't depressed, he was lonely and suicidal." Lonely and suicidal sounds like offshoots of depression to me, and I didn't understand Kaya's need to make a distinction. I was also thrown off by her explanation for not owning a car. Isn't it just as easy for her to run off in a borrowed car as it is for her to run off in a car she owns? And if her parents are so deeply worried about her running off, it seems unlikely that'd they would send her to live somewhere else with relatives she hardly knows.