hi, would you mind reading my story, i would love some constructive criticism and what you think about it

"All Boy's School Survival Guide" for girls

Synopsis:

Aliza is in a binding situation, literally! With her breasts constricted, wearing her brother's loose clothing, and dropping her voice to the lowest level, she's attending Ascham, an all boy's school! If that's not enough, throw in an extremely hot roommate, who suspects Aliza, aka Alex, of not being exactly what "he" appears to be and you have a chaotic relationship---if you can even call it that.
http://www.wattpad.com/257206-quot-all-boys-school-survival-guide-quot-for-girls

Hey!Could you please check out my story,The Heist,Girls and 3Hot Hostages.Please,I"d love your feedback.Thanks.
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