Hello everyone! My name is Daron. I mainly write poetry. This is my passion in writing. I mostly write about love or heartbreak, but there are other topics there too. Feel free to check out some of my poetry. I also write stories. My first story, She Took My Breath Away, is officially published on Amazon! Those of you who like my romance poetry or like romance will like that story. Here is the link to purchase it for $12.81: http://www.amazon.com/She-Took-My-Breath-Away/dp/1500487899/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1413742225&sr=8-1&keywords=She+Took+My+Breath+Away Those of you who like murder, horror, suspense, and mystery, I have a story called We The Jury Find You Dead. Trust, it will have you hooked from the start...or at least that's what my fans say... I love talking to people! Feel free to contact me anytime! Twitter: https://twitter.com/DBIGS0013 Tumblr: http://itsdbigs.tumblr.com Email: firstname.lastname@example.org YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCYeV-C_R3hoO__PXMv5ksXw I appreciate those that take the time to read my work! Goals! 500 Followers 500 votes on We The Jury Find You Dead 20,000 reads on We The Jury Find You Dead Get a novel in the top 5 of any list Get a poem in the top 10 of any list
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Description: This is the prologue to my novel, "She Took My Breath Away". If you like it, feel free to buy on Amazon for $12.81! Also, feel free to share with family/friends! http://www.amazon.com/She-Took-My-Breath-Away/dp/1500487899/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1413...
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Excellent start! If I can offer some friendly advice, I would recommend more description in your chapter. For the most part, you are just telling me all the details of the characters and their surroundings as if they were a grocery list. You should be able to paint a picture with your words that lets my imagination draft up a vivid image of the scene based on how you describe it. Happy writing!
I just uploaded a ton of poetry and stories for you all to enjoy!