Honestly, you don't have to edit it. The plot here is great. The best horror films don't give away much, for example: the Blair Witch Project.... Later... You're a great writer, but you seem to have a similar problem that I had, and still kinda have in a lesser form. And that problem is length. I... A Man in an Overcoat @TheyCallMePinkyCX Thx so much ^^ the only thing I can possibly ask you is if you could tell the what errors I made, but thx again ^^ They call me Lucifer.