keytomyheartx3
1 year ago

Thanks for adding my story Zander Boys & Me to your library! I would love to know your feedback :D

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XxhumphxX
1 year ago

Thank u 4 ur advice

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wishingandbelie...
1 year ago

Ok so I like the story
space the paragraphs better cause it's getting confusing
too muddled (hopefully this is the right word) together if you know what I mean
Some grammatical errors here and there
Wording the sentences better would be nice
Have someone edit this before you post or something
Fixing grammatical errors is pretty important to a good story
wait so, how old is the main character?
Capitalization - make sure the right letters are capitalized
like in the title
keep in check when using "me" or "I" when grouping them up with other nouns
like "me and my friend" or something like it
try seeing if the sentence works out with only the "I" or "me" first
I always did hate fixing my "me" and "I"
I still make that mistake....blahh...
your paragraphs are pretty long
when writing conversations try moving each to a different line if not spoken by the same person
like
"ugtvhjb"(person1)
"iycvjv"(person 2)
It makes it clearer
add a character list or something so the reader don't get confused of who is who
like you know the character list people put on the side or the story
it gives a clear picture
maybe add a song or something
I really do like your story though
sorry for the criticism
blahh.....I feel like a grammer nazi...
kinda am....
hope it doesn't make you feel bad
i'm not trying to make you feel bad
it is actually harder to get a good story down rather than doing well in the grammar
Keep up with the good work!!
I really like the story!
remember, every author has their editor so don't worry too much on grammar
good luck!! work hard!

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XxhumphxX
1 year ago

oh you just tell your friends i guess

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theonewhowrites...
1 year ago

I don't know how to promote D:

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XxhmphxX
1 year ago

our names r really close! that's soooo cool

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