Am a little book worm love to read !! Especially romance novels xD I don't write stories but maybe I could one day.... Lol hehe <3
Location:London, United Kingdom
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veryyy ill :(, all alone and just editing peoples work... and eating Toffifee nougat chocolates :(
Save Me, Daddy
The story line is quite interesting, I think it's enough to pull in a reader interested in this genre. The grammar needs some work, but not too bad over all. The prologue as a whole was comprehendible and well thought out with a little more time spent on improving it and maybe rephrasing some things would make it more appealing. xD p.s. I don't know if this would be helpful but your prologue (and epilogue, if you choose to do one) can be in a different type of narrative perspective (i.e. first, second, third person etc.) to the rest of the novel. hope this helps!