About me:
I'm an eighteen-year-old who's currently studying at Waterloo and damn is this place cold (lived my whole life in a really hot place and only saw real snow here the first time in eighteen years). I'm the silent quiet type of girl who doesn't know how to approach people and suck at social interaction. But if I may say so, I do have a pretty wild side which I hardly/don't know how to show.

My type of story? I love fantasy/sci fi, anything that surpasses reality--'cause reality sucks. Or at least, the world of fiction wins reality anytime. You're welcome to ask me to read your story, but I'm a picky, picky reader. I look for originality/good plot and good grammar. Don't ask me to check out your story if you're not prepared to take blunt words.

*My older stories have tons of grammar mistakes, excuse them if you decide to check them out.
I'm not going back to edit them because I'm constantly learning new things, and I don't want to fix up the mistake only to realize later on there were more I could've fixed.

If you wanna talk to me, about anything really, inbox me. I'll respond as soon as I can ^_^

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5 Published Works

Featured work.

The Deal with the Demon Prince

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Description: A hundred and seventeen years ago, a demon offered a girl who was on the verge of death a deal. Having no other choices, she accepted and gained an almost immortal body. It was only when she got it that she discovered that immortality is nothing but...

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The_Black_Butterfly commented on The Arcane - Chapter 1

All right. So first of all, avoid using words like stuff. First, it means things but you're using it to refer to living creatures. Second, it doesn't sound nice unless you want to sound reallly informal or sarcastic.

The narration of the paragraph wasn't very smooth. I don't really know why but some dialogues aren't clearly separated. There's a space after " and there's a strange u at the end of one dialogue on the second page.

Oh, the dialogues. The thing about them is try and make them sound like they're from different characters, each with his or her own personality. Yours so far sound pretty similar.

Content. Your first chapter doesn't really contain anything that makes your story stands out. Nothing really happens in it.

Grammar. There were quite a few mistakes. Like 'their's' instead of theirs.

The introduction at the start:does make your story different and I'm pretty sure that if done well, your chapter can look very interesting. The first few paragraphs were basically the background of your story so I'd suggest polishing them.
If you can, try to rephrase them or reposition them so instead of a boring two parts of a chapter, you get something creative.

Believe me when I say when a story stands out, readers will really *want* to read it.

(Sorry, if this sounds blunt, it's a.m. here and I can barely think. Hopefully what I said will help you)