Thank you so much for the great feedback, and the time it took to write this critique. I appreciate all kinds of feedback, and I agree with you on a number of levels. I have considered writing this story in two parts, but I'm afraid I do not have enough content to make a second book. The ending is coming very soon. Thank you again for your kind words. :)
Hi everyone! My names Dess. I originally came from Quizzilla but then moved to Goodreads (who has done great by me btw) and then I found wattpad and I thought I'd try it out. I'm a writer, and I want to get my stories published someday. Here's my goodreads profile: http://www.goodreads.com/user/show/3707331-dess Well about me... I'm a manic aussie 20 year old. I love writing novels, poetry and stories. I have an antique collection of books. Reading is a common past time of mine, as is astronomy and contemplating the universe. I'm a daydreamer and I love to get lost in the maze of my mind; you never can find the way out.
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Description: "The team of doctors worked around the bed, tubes in hand. My stomach flipped. I couldn't watch this. I resisted the urge to be sick and started to turn away, but something stopped me. I looked down at Tyson’s fingers wrapping around mine. Tightly...