Status: Finally - Two new chapters. If you're still hanging around (hope u are!) drop me a comment and tell me if they can be improved in any way! (11 months ago)
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In need of harsh and brutally honest criticism for my book, A Child's Cry. I plan to publish it this year but first want to see what sort of feedback I could get on it. Be as rough, tough, and cutting as you can- I can't afford to put something in print only to discover later that I am a horrific writer. Thanking you in advance - TheHiddenHeart
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 | A Child's Cry"It was March 31, 2005. I was ten years old. They came at night. They had guns. It was my worst nightmare come to life." A harrowing recount of a true story tha... read more 5,399 reads  65  36 |
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TheHiddenHeart
11 months ago
I've uploaded 2 new chapters - please check them out and tell me what you think of them :) The 9th chapter is particularly emotional... I'm not sure if I nailed it or not so let me know!
Skatona
1 year ago
if you can check this out please http://www.wattpad.com/2645787-chained-destiny#
TheHiddenHeart
1 year ago
I have just uploaded the eighth chapter of 'A Child's Cry.' I will be uploading the chapters on a weekly basis from now on. Thank you, thank you, thank you to those who have been giving me feedback! It's so, so helpful. I've already done some further editing to the prologue and I like what I was able to change... I've also been wondering about interspersing some more 'childhood' memories in between the 'painful' chapters... any thoughts on that idea? I've always been my own worst critic; I have yet to meet someone who is harder on myself than I am, lol. If you fit the bill, come on over... I want this book to be the best that it can be. Thanks again! TheHiddenHeart
TheHiddenHeart
1 year ago
@young7 Sadly, yes. And thank you, I'm glad to hear you like it. Any criticism you can offer? Any way can it improve?
young7
1 year ago
I love your story and is it really true?
TheHiddenHeart
1 year ago
@ForeverHope Thank you very much!
ForeverHope
1 year ago
Welcome to Wattpad(:
TheHiddenHeart
1 year ago
Sorry for spamming your inboxes! Just want to get a few chapts. online before seeking out more critics. Thanks to those who fanned, voted, and commented. It's greatly appreciated. It's feedback I'm looking for though, so if you can, help me to get this story out there. Thanks! TheHiddenHeart
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@wattycriticism Thank you for your comment. It was very helpful! Yes, the details are definitely a bit blurred at this point (I purposefully chose...A Child's Cry
@AngelaCook Thank you for reading and giving your feedback... I will be uploading soon. Any constructive criticism you can offer??
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@darkTrisha Thanks for pointing that out! I didn't notice that... I'll fix it right away :) I'm glad to hear that the emotions are translating...
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@DemonGirl Thank you; that's very appreciated. And what a relief.... so no grammatical mistakes? No confusion so far?
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@Kyolovescookies Yes, it is tragic. The government's intervening so often can only be attributed to the fact that this family defied all normalcy...
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