| Name | Nicholas Stillman |
| Location | not specified |
| Member Since | Apr 22, 2012 |
| Votes Received | 29 |
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 | Snowed (Watty Awards 2012)30 parts / 16 pages, updated Apr 29, 2012 The future North America has a way of cleaning out its least successful plebeians--by taking their money, then their lives. A strange entrepreneur with an unearthly talent for marksmanship offers his clients a timelier means of escape.  2,299 reads  29  41 |
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LittleMissLiaaa
11 months ago
hey :) i read your constructive advice in a book and i was wondering if it would be okay if you would give my story a shot? it's entitled My Universe. i really need constructive criticism to know what i should improve on. thank you so much.
theSeerOfSpace
1 year ago
I read the first chapter and i do have to say, I didn't catch any major mistakes but if there's something I missed, please do let me know!
Eunica
1 year ago
Thanks for the criticism! Helped a lot! fanned! Thanks! xx
callmeishaa
1 year ago
Heyy. I have read your previous feedbacks, and can I have my feedback? If yes, cool, here's my story :http://www.wattpad.com/story/1255835-death-of-june . If not, that's cool to. :)
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