@LetoAtreides Thanks for the critisism i really appreciate it as i really want to improve :p i normally would have wrote more its just that this... A long story short: Trapped... @BrambleBriar thnks!! if you thought that was good read my slightly longer story the fear its a bit better and longer!! xx A long story short: Trapped... oh my god its amazing! who could have thought there was so much action in the first chapter!! xx A Gift from Venus wow this is really good! im defo adding this to my reading list!!! xx California Dreaming