Marcus Jenson is not what you would call a hero. He's about as far from Indiana Jones and James Bond as you can get. But when Marcus is thrown into the mysterious realm of "the cave," the fate of the universe suddenly rests in his hands.
Hi there! I'm not sure if you remember me or not but about a year a go you read my extremely short first draft of the first of the Born Human trilogy. (Previously known as Born Human. Due to die an experiment, but now it is know as Born Human. Due to die the Creation of a Madman.) I was just wondering if you could perhaps critique the second draft of the new version of book one that I am in the process of editing. No worries if you can't, I don't mind.
- E C Cooledge :)
Not really my kind of story to be honest. But I really like your dialogue, it was really cute and realistic :) This Little Girl I really like the story but sometimes you tell a little more than show. Like when you say "making him look creepy and gross" it would be better if... Falling For The Best Friend I really like how you immediately throw the reader into a completely new freaky world. Keep it up :D The Meteor Moon