About

Hallo! Ja, ich kann klein Deutsche. 

Okay, so I had to write a little in German. I don't even know if that's right. xD

 Name: Abby

Age: 16 (I still can't drive :3 )

Language: English, but I can understand German to a certain degree

Major: English and German

Minor: Business

College (hopefully): University of Mobile or University of South Alabama

Future Job(s): English teacher in Germany, translator for Mercedes, or accounting for Mercedes

Why I Love Writing: It's life, simple as that. 

Okay, so I guess that's it.
  • Location:
    Oktoberfest
  • Joined:
    2 years ago

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6 Published Works

Featured work.

The Fate of the Forge, A Chronicles of Steel Short Story *Coming Soon*

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Other Works by INeedMyPurpleBack.
Shadows of the Past

Shadows of the Past

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My fingers drummed nervously on the table. I slammed my fist down onto the flat surface, the sound of a...

Bits and Pieces

Bits and Pieces

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Red Stains

Red Stains

49 1 1

The Day My Life Ended

The Day My Life Ended

92 3 2



INeedMyPurpleBack
I think you have a good start, but my pet peeve is short chapters. So I don't like that aspect. I just think it's stupid and unprofessional because a chapter is like a short story. Maybe, that's just my opinion. Your detail is very well thought out, I just think the dialogue could be a little better. It's flat and just seems ordinary, nothing stands out about it and I found myself skimming over. Which again I normally don't read stories like this, so that could be my bias opinion getting in the way. Overall your grammar was very good, which was a major refresher. I hope I helped a little bit. (:
INeedMyPurpleBack commented on Origami Girl - Prologue


INeedMyPurpleBack
I think this was a truly nice beginning because it was simple and got to the point. There were hardly any grammatical errors, which was truly refreshing, and I give you props for that. I think you could expand on the cover, but overall it is nice. I also think you could add a little bit more detail, at the beginning you were going strong but then it kind of lagged off. Other than that, nice job!