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Call me Nhovee, Ember, or November. It's all up to you.

I'm a struggling, ambitious, amateur writer.

I'm such a lazy person.
I'm a reader, a critic and a friend... well, that is, to those who can handle my tantrums (lol)
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13 Published Works

Featured work.

The Wicked Cinderella

Social data: 10.5K reads. 403 votes. 312 comments.

Description: [COMPLETED, under revision] Wala raw permanente sa mundo kundi pagbabago. Siya na ngayon ang malupit na kontrabida habang ang dapat sana'y magiting na prinsipe niya ay parang aso na lamang na sunod nang sunod sa lahat ng gusto niya. Sounds weird, bu...

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HotNovember23
sorry to say this but... is it really not your usual mafia story? university of howell reminds me of so many books on wattpad. penddleton high. yung school sa fearless queen, yung school ni avah maldita. usual na sa wattpad world ang school na pinamumunuan ng gangster at mayayamang students so naghahanap ako ng iba. hinahanap ko yung sinasabi mong "not usual"

yes, it is unusual for a "normal, existing" school, but for a wattpad book? i'm afraid not.

i know this comment sounded all too negative.

medyo off lang talaga. and...  asan na yung twins? i think isa sa kanila yung may pov sa ending... though i'm not really sure. medyo disappointed ako sa chapter na to for some reasons. :(


HotNovember23
owkies alam ko sinabi kong ayoko ng something morbid pero aaminin ko, naghanap ako ng ganun sa chapter na to. nag expect ako pero iba yung nakita ko. obviously, sila yung nag set up ng bomb for some reason and i think yung picture in the beginning is alejandro's. i mean parang may grudge sila dun sa matanda and hell, no one's gonna blame them! 

the character of hance. wtf? i hope isa sya sa mga nategi sa bomba bwahaha! kadiring pedophile yun! 

nice chapter, again, except for the technicalities aaaannnddd!

alam ko sinabi ko sa prologue na hindi ko na yun papansinin but i'm sorry i cant help it.

you seem to abuse your apostrophe sometimes. sa words na "na rin," there's no need to use an apostrophe kasi wala namang in-omit na letra. just a space will do.

second, the use of "ani". ani is different from "sabi," "wika," "saad" and the likes. how is it different?

"ani" is actually a contraction on "wika ni"

so di mo pwedeng sabihing ani ni chorva kasi technically, sya ay wika ni ni chorva. likewise, it's wrong to say "ani ko" kasi hindi mo naman sasabihing "wika ni ko". yun lang. i just felt the need to say it. but nontheless, your narration's awesomw
HotNovember23 commented on Wicked - Once Upon A Time


HotNovember23
okies... so may nasilip akong onti sa technicals pero di ko na sasabihin since nasabi mo na sa blurb na ie-edit mo pa sya..

omaygad. i'm not into morbid stuffs so goodness... buti di na dinetalye kung anong ginawa nila sa buntis bwahaha

dun lang sa "Iie"... nabasa ko sya as LIE. as in yung tatlong "Iie" as LIE, LIE, LIE. tapos sabi ko, "anong LIE?" saka ko lang narealize, japanese nga pala yung babae wahaha

scary start.. pero okay naman sya. minus lang sa technicals.
HotNovember23 commented on Wicked - Once Upon A Time


HotNovember23
hi! i'm here to do my task as your current partner.. soo....

first things first!

title. wow! syempre naman astig sakin yung title mo kasi kamag anak nung libro ko joke! pero di nga, title pa lang, panghatak na. alam mo yung minimalistic pero may dating?

i like the cover also. parang fantasy yung dating nya sakin... wait fantasy nga ba to? i like the choices of colors... parang bagay na bagay sya sa title at mukhang talagang pinag isipan... i mean, the concept, the shades... cool!

blurb. WOW! yun yung mas nagdala pa lalo. andun yung mystery sa blurb na talagang mapapaisip ka pag nabasa mo na. medyo nagulat nga ako mafia story pala to haha

anyway babasahin ko pa lang ang prologue lol
HotNovember23 commented on Wicked - Chapter 2: Innocent Ones


Nakabaksak ang mahaba kong kulot na kulay dark brown na may kaunting light brown na buhok sa ilalim ng aking dibdib.
HotNovember23
abuse of "na". i think you can do better than this. awkward din kasi basahin. 

instead maybe you can say, "nakabagsak ang dark brown kong buhok. May kaunting light brown iyon at ang haba ay lagpas sa ilalim ng aking dibdib."

oops, just a suggestion though. :)