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DeeDeeBarbiie

Name	Dee Dee Barbiie
Location	New York
Birthday	Oct 29
Member Since	May 04, 2012
Votes Received	25
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My name is Diamond im a nerd 

I like all kinds of music :) I am a nice person if you get to know me :) I'm 15 years old . 

My birthday is in October 29 my favorite color is green blue and purple . 

My favorite celebrity / Singer is Michael Jackson &lt;3 

I love books based on Ancient Egypt ;) I am half Egyptian and German , Native American I am mixed with more but that's what I'm mostly mixed with .

I'm one of those girls at school who always have a turtle back pack because I'm a nerd :P 

* Show love and read my books and I will for sure do the same ! <3*

Works

Lost in time

2 pages, updated May 16, 2013 PG-13

Melissa the trouble maker of Mid Wood school gets bored easily her best friend Angie ask her to go on a school field trip to the museum but its not just any ordinary museum M... read more

7 reads

The Haunted

Historical Fiction #777

2 pages, updated May 14, 2013

Mr and Mrs. Evers is in for a big surprise when they get their biggest deal ever ! Or is it to good to be true ? A mansion or is it a long lost love ?

2 reads

Corrupted

3 parts / 4 pages, updated Jan 24, 2013

Sumrah is a slave trying to help pay off her ill father's debt by working as a servant for the pharaoh at the pyramids . One day she heard cries of agony and horrific screams f... read more

33 reads

The unwanted crown of queen Nefertiti 14 century BC ( Watty Awards )

39 parts / 11 pages, updated Jul 04, 2012 PG-13

A archaeologist named Sarah is plotting to steal queen Nefertiti crown when she puts it on she goes into a deep sleep and finds herself in... read more

5,780 reads

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My Vampire Love

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$<div class="storytip"><span class="title">The Princess and the Pauper {A princess' tale of love}</span><br>by dixie90<br><br>Princess Ariana is hurriedly helped by her trusted maidens to escape on the day of her wedding. Caught between lies and losses, she is faced with a chance for love... the love that she thought she had lost... Where will her treacherous jour...<br><br>5 pages <img src="http://a.wattpad.net/image/22007/v2/votes.png" width="14" height="14"/> 26 <img class="rating" src="http://a.wattpad.net/image/22007/RATED_PG-13.png" /> </div>$
The Princess and the Pauper {A...

2,203 reads

Turning Sands

23,746 reads

Part One Arrival Chapter One:...

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DeeDeeBarbiie
7 months ago

@Alexandria995 Thank you !!!:D

Alexandria995
7 months ago

@DeeDeeBarbiie Corrupted sounds really interesting, but in the summary you have a few grammar errors. There should be a period at the end of pyramid and start a new sentence with one (delete the but). There should be a period between room and the. Where you wrote "the next day queen Nefertiti and four of her daughters gone missing", it should be "The next day Sumrah finds out Queen Nefertiti and four of her daughters have gone missing". The q in Queen should be a capital. You misspelled screams and heard should be hears (she heard cries ...). I would suggest finding an editor to edit your work or even looking through your work a second or third time to find mistakes. If you use word, it should pick up some of the spelling and grammar mistakes, but it won't find them all.

DeeDeeBarbiie
8 months ago

@UniquenessLovex3 Hey sis I miss u! I tranfered schools

DeeDeeBarbiie
8 months ago

@UniquenessLovex3 my phone off :( I miss you sooooo much <3 I changed /:

UniquenessLovex...
8 months ago

Hey Diamond ! I miss you guys /: are you coming to school on Thursday or did you change from schools ? If you can text me.

ScreamXForXRain...
8 months ago

Hey! How are things ? Im sorry for not talking with any of you guys my grandfather died not to long ago but what about you have you already moved probably have skool starting in two day my phone is acting stupid so I cant text anyone yet but u can still call me anyway text u later :p

UniquenessLovex...
8 months ago

Hey Diamond :) I miss you guys :(

DeeDeeBarbiie
9 months ago

@ScreamXForXRainX Hey!

DeeDeeBarbiie
9 months ago

@Alexandria995 thanks for your feedback and opinions ! :D I agree my ELA is bad :( I'm the future I will do research on my next book :)

Alexandria995
9 months ago

@DeeDeeBarbiie I think your story the unwanted crown of queen nerfertiti is interesting, but there are a lot of grammar and historical errors. You have a lot of run on sentences . A large historical error you have made is writing Nerfertiti's (Sarah) husband as Tutankhamen . Nerfertiti was the equivalent of Tutankhamen's step mother, she was a consort of his father. Also, the way you write Tutankhamun's thoughts and dialogue isn't exactly correct. He would have though differently the same with people of his time. Some of the terms such as washroom and honeymoon wouldn't have exactly existed back then. Bathing chamber might be more correct, but I recommend doing some research on the type of terms and how people talked in ancient Egypt . Tutankhamun would not have thought 'is she ready'? Marriage back then would have been consummated right away, without any questions. I do find your story very interesting, it's just some research needs to be done.

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