![]() | awakening - book 1 rebirthCorvus Black is an ordinary boy when until he is attacked by a mysterious group of warriors. After news of a hunt for his uncle reaches him Corvus along with his ... read more |
![]() | Short Story by cmacki200 - called Trapped |
Good morning, just dropped by here to say thanks for fanning, it means a load!
nice i shall check... thanks
@Cmacki200 Yeah, the top three stories in my list of works. they are the most recent and display how i've improved.
Thanks for fanning me, Cmacki, and for all the awesome comments you've left me on P.I.E and on my message board. I appreciate all of them.
@AnAdventurer thats good. u say youve got s lot better... so is there a more recent story if urs i could resd which would show that?
@Cmacki200 I'm glad you enjoyed it. And it's funny, all the stuff you pointed outI already know. To be honest, I'm not at all happy with the way the story is turning out. I started it so long ago and I've been writing it on and off. I've greatly improved since I started so what I think I need to do is restart it and write with the skills I have now, rather than continue an already broken story. And thanks for reading :)
@AnAdventurer ha i love ur story! before i qas actually folloeing it without knowing the title. i like ur idea abd the shadow lords are awesome. however i will say i did lose interest at sone points and found the detail and story a bit weak at points. now im not far into just after the second dragon is sighted. i enjoyed the fights a lot and think that they are written impressively well. last criticism would be i didnt feel the main characters were dominating and were strong enough in character to properly captivate the reader but im expected developnent throughout so thats not a bad thing really. finally technically i think theres a few mistakes but ur structure is way better than mine and really clear. all in all really good imaginative story which ill continue to read
one vote is my own btw. a mistake
aha same as my mate. awakening rebirth is a name for a story we both liked but he beat me too it but i done ir anyway. i apolgise ive theyre the same but i assure u theyre orginal. ill check urs out but :-P
hey dude, i just noticed that we have stories with the exact same titles. Isn't that strange? http://www.wattpad.com/story/481248-awakening-book-1-rebirth-editing