So first you say mates and then you say reckon soooo....is she British or Texan?? IM TEXAN!!!!!
Instead of having 'and' replace it with a comma. Just a suggestion I think it sounds better!
I really don't wanna sound like a bitch but to help you add more detail and don't rush into it so fast
I like to read these stories! It makes my fell lucky that I didn't have to go through that! INLOVE with ur writting keep it up
Great story!! You seem to get your past/present tenses mixed up and sadly...I don't really like the main character too much. But other than that, it's great
Please please please update soon. Don't leave me hanging like that! I want to know what happened!! Anywho... Will wait patiently!! =)
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