@AlwaysDramione I read only the first chapter because I don't have time to read the rest now, so I'll put it in my read later. :)
@AlwaysDramione No problem, you can take a critic, that's good. :) The Idea is great, though!
I like it, but it's moving a bit too quickly. Maybe a little fight in the cupboard or something could spice it up a bit.
That's pretty good. It got my attention (although the end made me a little uncomfortable, it was still pretty awesome).
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