The story was good but, I think you should describe how Benn and Hadley look before you mention their names.
Hope I helped!
This is good! I actually like this short story. I voted and I will fan you if you fan me (:
Btw were they australian?
I like Jamie. :D
it's a really good start, you should continue. I like how descriptive you are.
Good job. :)
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