Long Time No See - A Harry Potter Love Story

18 Part Story 23.9K Reads 418 Votes
Almost_Mason By Almost_Mason Updated 7 months ago
What would happen if you knew Harry Potter since grade school , and you were totally in love with him . What would you do if you were practically invisible to him , but didn't mind ? that's where my story starts
Bauhinia Bauhinia 3 years ago
This is a really good idea, and I like where it's going, but I think it would be easier to read if it was split up into paragraphs for each time someone different speaks. Good start!!
TheFactionless TheFactionless 3 years ago
This is really good but try taking a space between a few sentences that way it's easier to read.