Bite Marks...

21 Part Story 1.9K Reads 33 Votes
chasestatus14 By chasestatus14 Updated 3 years ago
Ambrogino Ciro very much a blood monster, she has been chased from each country with her protector and best friend Fino, they are known to the hunters and are needing to be taken down...and vampire royalty agrees, but do the humans and wolves?
LouBellz LouBellz 2 years ago
not bad for a first chapter. I'm in publishing so I am tuned into writing errors and picking them up.  There are a couple of things but all in all a good start.
HopelessDreamer24 HopelessDreamer24 3 years ago
I thought this was really good :)
Whilst what you've done with the dialogue looks pretty it's not always necessary as usually italics is used to put a stress on a particular word or whatever. 
but yeah, good start! :D x
Keep it up! and you've got my vote :)